Victory for the ACT Student Text 15e

V ICTORY P RACTICE T EST A NSWERS AND E XPLANATIONS • 477

Language Use and Conventions: The essay contains several weaknesses in this area: • The essay contains some usage and mechanics errors. ጖ ‘†› ’ƒ”ƒ‰”ƒ’Š ͳǣ Dz›‘—ǯ”‡ ‘’’‘‡–dz ƒ† Dz›‘—ǯ”‡…ƒ’ƒ‹‰dz •Š‘—Ž† „‡…Šƒ‰‡† –‘ Dz›‘—” ‘’’‘‡–dz ƒ† “your campaign.” Ȉ ‘…Ž—•‹‘ǣ Dzƒ Ž‘– ‘”‡ ‹ϐŽ—‡…‡ –Š‡ –Š‡ ”‡•– ‘ˆ –Š‡…‘—–”›dz •Š‘—Ž† „‡…Šƒ‰‡† –‘ Dz–Šƒ –Š‡ ”‡•– ‘ˆ –Š‡…‘—–”›Ǥdz The word “than” should be used for comparison. • The use of informal language is one of the main problems in this essay. The writer expresses a few ideas that could be turned into strong arguments if they were worded more carefully. For example, in the introduction, the ’Š”ƒ•‡ Dz›‘— Šƒ˜‡ –‘ „‡ ˜‡”› ”‹…Š –‘ ”— ˆ‘” ‘ˆϐ‹…‡dz…‘—Ž† „‡ ”‡™‘”†‡† ƒ• Dz›‘— —•– „‡ ™‡ƒŽ–Š› –‘ ”— ˆ‘” ‘ˆϐ‹…‡Ǥdz – might help to read this essay and reword phrases with slang or informal language. Summary and Conclusions: The writer’s opinion is clear and consistent, but not all of the main arguments are well developed, and the second body paragraph does not use logical reasoning. Furthermore, the writer does not consider the ‘’’‘•‹‰ ˜‹‡™’‘‹–•Ǥ Š‹• ‡••ƒ› ™‘—Ž† Ž‹‡Ž› ”‡…‡‹˜‡ ƒ •…‘”‡ ‘ˆ ͷǤ